Lee, ClaraJean, Fredreick H., Vanyan, and Jack

Common Themes:

• Isolated people
• Mostly loss in their pasts’

Lee Ocean: "It may have been five minutes or twenty but sometime later he left the pool, hair wet only from the rain."

Though the phone's volume was low, the message seemed oppressively loud in the silence that had gripped the room for days.

• This sentence used imagery well to convey the somber tone of the story. The compound nature of the sentence creates contrast against the other simpler sentences.
• A piercing scream shook Lee from his thoughts and he glanced up at the Maitland parking deck, searching for its source.
• A simple sentence that effectively furthers the plot of the blog. Creates conflict.

ClaraJean Mallory:"After downing her coffee and a couple bites of toast, ClaraJean got ready to go to the asylum as she does every Wednesday. Her son would be expecting her. "

“Even though he was the reason her husband was gone, he was the last piece she had left of him.”-

• creates a mystery and leaves audience wanting to know more about the situation, how did her son cause the death of her husband? Also shows how desperate ClaraJean is to hold onto her husband.
• “They used to get up together and prepare a feast - both believing that breakfast was the most important meal of the day.”-
• interesting contrasts with the rest of the entry, more upbeat and paints a happy picture. Highlights the difference in character between past Clara Jean and present Clara Jean. Also a more complex structure than other sentences in the entry.

Frederick Hanky "After work, I picked one of the droopy white roses off of one of the flower pots that were outside
the fire station and, I left to visit the cemetery where my mom was buried."

1. “local quarry”, Rain
2. Bill the plumber
3. Internal: Death of his mother, isolated (obviously means a lot because when he thought he was going to die, he grabbed the rose for his mom). External: hydroplane, lost car, town plumbing issues
4. How did his mom die? Why was he at the quarry?
5. What was the relationship with his mom?

Vanyan Gason: "The rhythm of the clicking of the fan matched every beat of Vani's heart, every beat that told him again and again: it should've been him."

“Vani rolled on his back and stared at the ceiling, the ceiling that once covered a family, but now only covered a weak man.”

• This sentence has a structure that grabs the reader's attention and provides a look into Vanyan’s state of “a weak man.”
• “The rhythm of the clicking of the fan matched every beat of Vani's heart, every beat that told him again and again: it should've been him.”
• The beginning of this sentence seems forced but toward the end the author writes in a way that makes the sentence flow better and become more interesting. There is also an element of mystery and intrigue that will hold the reader’s attention later in their story.

Jack Stars

1. “There you go Mr. Evans,” Rain
2. Being awake at night, wanting to save everyone, how much he looks at the stars
3. Internal: Conflict in the necessity to save everybody from something, it appears he is in the need for a home/place to stay. External: being concerned about Mr. Evans
4. Everything regarding his motivation and roots, how old he is, why he’s so specific with scientific knowledge, why is he obsessed with time, why does he want to save people?
5. What does he mean by save, and by what? Is he mortal? How can he give people wishes?